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Сообщение от 320231

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Сообщение от R1TeR

vary well writen, I liked it

Сообщение от TheMediator

Seems too "uber" for my tastes.

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Сообщение от TheMediator

When he was a teen, he became a commander, even though you describe the character as anti-social. He survives multiple massacres. He just "decides to become a paladin". The whole thing is just an "uber" backstory to me. Also, his backstory doesn't really explain why he has all these traits, just to establish him as a "bad ass".

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Сообщение от TheMediator

Well, you are forgetting that humans are adult at age of 15 in Azeroth, so he was basically, a adult.

Mmm, I wasn't aware of that, but I guess it makes sense.

At the paladin point - the lore in WoW, at least to my knowledge, is that you can't just "decide to become a paladin". There are plenty of soldiers who follow the light in the Argent Dawn/Argent Crusade who are solid warriors and worship the light but still can't channel its power. It takes years of specialized training to actually become a paladin.

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Сообщение от TheMediator

Alright, I guess that's reasonable.

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Сообщение от Adamsm

Anything else that you consider a bit 'off'?Your age is off, if he was born 8 years before the First War, he would be in his 40's not his 30's. Timeline says Wrath of the Lich King is 32 years after the Portal first opened/First War began.

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