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Short Story --- No Title. (9/2/09)
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Queggy
I
<3
it.
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Septimus
MOAR NAO.
It is a beautifully crafted piece of writing.
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Morec0
O.O
Amazing. Short and to the point, but packing as much character and plot as my own story.
Noticed one thing though, in the second paragraph you wrote
What if she could see him now?
Is 'she' intentional? Or was it supposed to be 'he,' reffering to the character father.
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Skreeran
Ho... Ly... Crap...
That was awesome, man. Nice and tragic, but in an incredible brutal and unfeeling way. Not to mention death by fire is nice and poignant, as well as being one of the most painful ways to die. Jeez, goosebumps...
/applaud
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HiVolt
Wow... This is a wonderful piece. By far, one of the most intriguing works I've seen. I truly hope you continue to post stories, even if they aren't like this one.
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Adamsm
Nicely done as always man.
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Gnub
Good stuff, liked the bitterness in it, even though it seemed bordering to emo at first when I read it. The whole thing about actually not knowing what race - hell,
anything
- about the storyteller, is actually a nice touch too. A story this short shouldn't "waste time" on such details anyway.
Would've been awesome if the last line would've been the only spoken line, filled to the brim with the bitterness to make a faster end to the life, or something.
Good work! :D
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Morec0
This story really reminded me of the macinima(spelling)
Blind
, in the sense that, while there is obviously some kind of plot, the details are so vauge that your mind has to go out on a limb and create a plot for it.
A very well done bit of work, hopefully you'll keep it up.
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Gnub
Would've been awesome if the last line would've been the only spoken line, filled to the brim with the bitterness to make a faster end to the life, or something.
That's actually a pretty interesting change, I like that. But I won't do it to the entire last line.
Glad you liked the suggestion :)
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