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Post by
Lombax
I will murder your entire family. Ramesses is a demigod, you can't beat that.
You can. The great god emperor of mankind is far greater.
Post by
Kristopher
This post used to contain things about my college essay. My college essay is complete and this has been cleared for safety reasons, but left for an explanation and to not disrupt the flow of the 'bin.
Post by
Rankkor
I will murder your entire family. Ramesses is a demigod, you can't beat that.
Yes you can. Most badass historical figure ever? That title goes to High Empress Maria Theresa (Mother of Marie Antoinette) Poster figure of what it means to be a Mama Bear, Badass Ruler, and who rubbed in the face of European nobility that ruling was not a Men-only job. Something that Frederick The Great learned the hard way during the Austrian Succession War.
Second place goes to Francisco De Miranda. Venezuelan patriot who spearheaded REVOLUTION across FIFTEEN COUNTRIES. See, unlike that whimp Simon Bolivar, liberating one country was not enough, and after starting the independence war to free Venezuela from Spain, he proceeded to light the fires of independence across the entire american continent. South AND North. Dude even fought side-by-side with Washington against the british, and was a feared combatant amongst the spaniard troops to the point that one of the largest bounties ever to have been offered for a single man was posted by the king JUST to capture him.
You can't get more badass than those 2. Too bad they lived in different times and never met, if they had actually married and had children, those children would had warped reality in a tidal-wave of awesomeness.
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240140
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Interest
What in the actual #$%^, guys.
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322702
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Post by
Lombax
I think I'm gonna go to sleep. And by sleep I mean play bejeweled on my phone for a million years.
Also you guys should know better than to mess with me when it comes to ancient egypt, come on.
Stop this heresy and obey the Imperium.
Post by
Interest
Interest now favorite historical figure!
Would it be trolling to make a thread called why Ramesses was not so great?
hint a line in this post was purely a joke, you have a 1/3 chance to get it right.
I'm not history yet, damnit.
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322702
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Kristopher
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322702
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Post by
Monday
Only game I enjoyed cheating in was GoldenEye (the old one). Some of the cheats in that game were ridiculous.
Post by
Kristopher
I personal have alot of fun cheating it up in games but that is my right as a person. I personal think it is very well written.
I hate how I write sometimes, I am always using: "I personal", " On another note", "so", and a few other thing to express my opinion and it gets very samey... I need more words in my head to use...
Read a lot of books. That's where a lot of my vocabulary came from. Whenever you see a word you don't know, write it down, and look it up when you have the time.
Only game I enjoyed cheating in was GoldenEye (the old one). Some of the cheats in that game were ridiculous.
See, things like that weren't really cheats. I feel those were more along the line of easter eggs.
Post by
Patty
Kris, too colloquial.
1) Don't use the first person. They already know you're outlining your viewpoint. Cut out all the "I say"s, "I believe"s, "I may be"s because they add nothing to what you're saying. If you want to add a personal touch, maybe mention at the end something about personal pride in achieving something yourself.
2) Almost
everything
is biased. Saying you might be, again, adds nothing.
3) I'm not a fan of the "one" pov written. Personal preference, but it bugs me.
Side-note... won't the colleges be able to see this online if they bother using a plagiarism checker (I know one was used on mine)? I'm not sure if uploading something like a university application statement is seen as fair, and might be highlighted for plagiarism.
Post by
HiVolt
I personal have alot of fun cheating it up in games but that is my right as a person. I personal think it is very well written.
I hate how I write sometimes, I am always using: "I personal", " On another note", "so", and a few other thing to express my opinion and it gets very samey... I need more words in my head to use...
Here you go.
Post by
Kristopher
Kris, too colloquial.
1) Don't use the first person. They already know you're outlining your viewpoint. Cut out all the "I say"s, "I believe"s, "I may be"s because they add nothing to what you're saying. If you want to add a personal touch, maybe mention at the end something about personal pride in achieving something yourself.
Might the first person be called for in this case? Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you. is the prompt, if you didn't see before. Please, feel free to correct me if I'm wrong. Because I probably am.
2) Almost
everything
is biased. Saying you might be, again, adds nothing.
Noted.
3) I'm not a fan of the "one" pov written. Personal preference, but it bugs me.
Eh, I was told "you" and other pronouns were too personal, so I'm going with "one."
Side-note... won't the colleges be able to see this online if they bother using a plagiarism checker (I know one was used on mine)? I'm not sure if uploading something like a university application statement is seen as fair, and might be highlighted for plagiarism.
I did think of that, and I hope it won't be a problem. I guess I can handle it immediately after I submit it though.
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322702
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HiVolt
Side-note... won't the colleges be able to see this online if they bother using a plagiarism checker (I know one was used on mine)? I'm not sure if uploading something like a university application statement is seen as fair, and might be highlighted for plagiarism.
I did think of that, and I hope it won't be a problem. I guess I can handle it immediately after I submit it though.
I'm not sure if pastebin would be subject to those plagiarism checks... After all, it's not exactly an academic database.
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