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Morec0
Looks good.
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Morec0
Make it longer (oh the irony), and add a bit more emphisis on character action.
ex.
"Tell me, was this dream," he paused for a breif moment, "dark? A haunting memory?"
you did a good job with that in some parts, try and carry it out a bit more.
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Morec0
looks good, I liked the troll's reaction to being blind. It had me starring at the screen in shock for a little bit, good work.
Might want to fix up the word 'are' in the last paragraph, though.
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